Could i be so wrong To put back my faith in you You who have stabbed me
The day is ending The night approaches so soon Drowning all that light
Where am i going Rushing and hustling like all Where am i heading
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For the thrid verse of the first post,I believe that the "rushing and hustling like all"; the "like" should have been perhaps, "and"?
Because then, it sounds more grammatically and audio-correct.
However, I think the 1st and 2nd verses are very good, however. I love to write contemporary haikus too and study them extensively so I apologise should I sound in any way, intrusive or rude.
3 comments:
For the thrid verse of the first post,I believe that the "rushing and hustling like all"; the "like" should have been perhaps, "and"?
Because then, it sounds more grammatically and audio-correct.
However, I think the 1st and 2nd verses are very good, however. I love to write contemporary haikus too and study them extensively so I apologise should I sound in any way, intrusive or rude.
Much love.
Hey thanks for the comment!
You are not rude at all!
I was deliberating between 'like' and 'and' but decided to choose 'like'. I guess 'and' does sound better but i wanted it to mean like in a rat race.
Haikus are so easy to write, they are amazing!
I amazed people actually read my nonsense! Thanks again!
WHO AH?!
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